Chapter 2
As soon as I left the house, I took off running. Tears blinded my vision, but I kept on going strong. It was true that I had been playing hooky from school, but it was for a good reason. I had realized that the more I go to school, the more the people will know me, and the more they know me, the closer they are to finding out that I am a Shifter. I couldn’t take that chance. Not now, not ever. The government was still looking for me after six years. I have no idea what they wanted from me.
After running a ways, I decided that I needed rest. My Dad used to copy whoever invented the phrase, and say, ‘You can’t run from you’re problems. You have to face them.’
I hissed under my breath. Yeah, well Dad, it’s not like I can actually go up to the government and say, ‘Here, you can have me.’ You taught me to run whenever danger strikes, and that’s what I’m going to do.
Suddenly, I felt my body changing deep inside me, and I knew that when the clock struck midnight, I would turn into a Shifter. And you know what? That was OK by me. Just because people are different doesn’t mean that you can treat them like dirt. I mean seriously, what’s wrong with turning into a sort of werecat every night? Nothing. What’s wrong with being the fastest person in the world at the age of thirteen? Nothing. What’s wrong with having extra strength, eyes that serve as night vision goggles, and ears that can hear the slightest sound a mile away? NOTHING! I don’t understand why everyone else doesn’t get that. Nobody’s perfect.
I lay down on the cool, dead grass, and cried. I normally don’t ever cry. Ever. But today, it was like the fighter within me died. Unexpectedly, I felt angry. I thought of Mom and Dad, and how they promised to come get me. Well, it’s been six freaking years and am I back on Tricopia with a bunch of other Shifters like me? No, I’m not. I’m still on Planet Earth, and I probably will be for the rest of my life. Thanks to my parents, I learned never to trust people. You can’t count on anyone, even the ones who love you the most. They say that their here for you, when really, they just lie.
I thought about these things for a long while, until my eyes started closing, and I drifted off into a deep sleep. Something that I needed for a long time.
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This is short. I mean, it's very short. I got that the protagonist isn't the most intelligent of beings, but he/she goes to school when the government is looking after him/her? He/she turns into some creature, and he/she still doesn't know why the government is after him/her?
Overall, the only thing that happened was:
Character runs, stops, and then falls asleep. The rest was all information dump. In other words, the piece was boring.
Thanks for your time, and improve lots.
Haha! I knew it! This sounded like the kind of story that involved something like super powers!
Uh, didn't spot any grammar errors. Just try to slow the pace a little. Add more description, that will help. . . wow did that sound as bossy as I thought it did? Sorry.
It's sooo short. You don't give us enough time to get into the story. I want to know what happens next. So post more soon OK? No rush.